A young man named Bruce went hunting in a huge river.
He had a 5 year-old sister, Libby, who was starving. So Bruce left his house that was made of wood and leaves. He saw the river after walking for ages through the forest of Oamaru. While he was running to the river, he saw something green in the corner of his eyes. The sun was shining on it, Bruce took a little look and realised it was an emerald! He saw it, took it, and went to the river. He caught a huge snapper and took it home to his sister. Libby was very happy when she ate the fish. Bruce looked at the emerald and had wondered what he was doing all along. The end.
Hello amazing Diyani =)
ReplyDeleteI really like your story about Bruce and Libby and how lucky Bruce was to find a emerald =D Is there by any chance there is another part of this story? AnYwAyS laters :>
Bonjour Hiwatt, actually no there is not another part. =(
ReplyDeleteBut I'm very happy and proud of Bruce to find a emerald!
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Hi Diyani. I recommend you to add a picture or something about your writing.
ReplyDeleteAnd your writing is 127 words. So its not perfectly 100 words.
Question: How long did it take you to make this writing?
Bye!
Hi Kaito! I actually do know that it s 127 words but least
Deleteit's a bonus! And it took me around 10-15 minutes.
And I couldn't put in a picture because its a fiction story.
=) Bye!
Hi Diyani, Thanks for replying to my comment! Wow you wrote that pretty fast! Maybe you could find a picture on the web? They have a lot of good pictures!
ReplyDeleteBYEE~!
Kia ora Diyani, I enjoyed reading your 100 word story. Finding an emerald is exciting and catching a snapper is great! Do you like eating fish?
ReplyDeleteI look forward to seeing more of your mahi (work) online soon.
Kia ora. I am Braden from St Mary’s School.
ReplyDeleteI really like how you said what type of fish it was and who he was with.
I learnt that they found a emerald.
Maybe you could do a longer reflection.
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